In other words, the story is dumb and doesn't realize how dumb it is. The narrator spends this whole bit thinking about how all these girls were buried alive within the walls of this house to keep it standing with their bones as though it isn't common sense that a rotting body inside a building would have the exact opposite effect. If that's not bad enough, the premise is silly. First calls tickets, yeah, okay, but how did they get there from the airport, apparently separately only to arrive at the house at the same time? It's a basic lack of scene setting that makes the whole story feel unmoored. A fifth of the way through the story and I've been treated to excessive and repetitive metaphor laden descriptions of the characters in all their insecure, petty, childishness, but still have no idea what this old Japanese mansion actually looks like, or what time of day it is, or even how these four people got there. The author isn't great a setting the scene either. Unfortunately the story itself isn't great either, since it comes down to a group of childish, insecure people who have all dated each other in a haunted house. It's so dense with metaphor and pretentious that the actual story drowns under it. The narrator is fine for the most part though sometimes she speaks a bit too fast which destroys what little atmosphere the writer is able to create. Pretentious prose combined with childish character
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